In this essay I know i did a very good job. But I do believe that I have to improve on my detailed sentences. I know that the reader would understand what i'm talikng about but I do need more detailed sentences. Also if u are reading this check out my intro, It Rocks! For real my hook draws you right in!
Will I Be Graduating In The Year Of 2011 At?
Constitution High school?
I can’t see the future but I know I will be graduating in 2011 at constitution high school. I know and I have no doubt that I am graduating in the year 2011. First and foremost I am very intelligent. I want to go to college and get a good job. Lastly, I just stay in school so I can stay away from teen problems.
First, being intelligent I have support from my family at home. My mom and dad mainly encourages me. They let me know that when you attend school you have the best future ever.
Next, employment. Without at least a high school diploma you can’t get a good job and without a good job you won’t always be financially stable.
Lastly, staying in school, out of trouble. Like becoming pregnant. Statistics scares me, it says that 45% of teens who are sexually active and becomes pregnant between the age of 15 and19 doesn’t return back to school.
So of course, I am graduating in the year of 2011. Just by me being intelligent, I want to go to college to get a good job and staying away from teen problems. I have a big goal of life ahead of me. Do you?
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